Nicole Colette
"is looking for work in Toronto"
Journal Entries for Nicole Colette
my first poem
May 24th, 2007 1:05 am MDT
Ok so i've been writing a poem and i thought i would post it to get some feed back on it. Just to let you know its not finished and its my first attempt at writing peotry. Please be gentle. When I am on mushrooms alone in my room, I sit in the dark and trip out to tunes, I'm not alone in my room you see I'm tripping out with myself, I and me. I sat my body down to rest, my spirit chose to roam instead, To roam the mountains, valleys, and plains, to bring back knowledge to feed my brain, Hurtling through space in a cosmic tomb, I know not where it is I zoom, I have hope for the destination ahead, but i can't shake this feeling of dread, My body goes rigid, my mind screams out, for quiet, for calm, for sanity to come, to come and silence the screaming inside and dry the tears from my eyes. Thank you for reading this and please leave a comment. Peace, Nicole
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Re: my first poem Mata May 24th, 2007 3:07 am MDT Nicole, poetry (whatever that is) is always difficult to comment upon. There's a number of definitions what peotry is, how it should be done, and how it changed in time. I never gave a damn, really -- and I'm writing songs .... So, if you free yourself from whatever definition of poetry, it leaves you with a means of expressing or conveying thoughts, ideas or emotions in your own individual way. Having said that, I couldn't possibly say your poem is good or bad or something in between. What I can say is, it created a picture in me, an emotion, an atmosphere -- I liked it and I thought about it. And if that was what any of the songs I ever wrote did to someone else, I'd be very happy. I'm looking forward to reading more from you. Thanks for sharing. Mata
